There were nearly 1700 entries in this year's competition. Our bank had announced it could no longer process American, Australian or Canadian cheques for us so we could accept payment from overseas only through Paypal and this definitely led to a slightly lower number of entries than in previous years. Strong poems stood out easily from the rest through the sureness and authority of the poet's voice. There were more poems deserving of a shortlisting than I had space on the shortlist for so I added another stratification of acknowledgement this year "Highly Commended" as distinct from "Shortlisted" and "Commended". Basically, highly commended poems were just as accomplished as many of the poems on the shortlist but lost out on a shortlisting due to the vagaries of my personal taste on decision day. Something else I noticed this year is that while a competition is always won by an individual poem, the authority of an overall submission can help an individual poem across the finish line and many of the finest poems shortlisted and highly commended this year were accompanied by other great work in the same submission.
Deciding on
a winner in a poetry contest is not an infallible process. I had difficulty
deciding which of these two Maya Catherine Popa (USA) poems should be the winner. Initially I was
pulled towards ‘The Bees Have Been Cancelled’ but approaching the deadline for
making a decision I swung in favour of ‘Hummingbird’. Both poems were part of a five poem submission
which impressed with its confidence, its authority. Although I recognised the
craft and accomplishment in the other three poems they were too discursive for
my own particular taste and would never have won the O’Donoghue Prize this year. I
mention them here to make a point about the vagaries of taste. Not only does taste play a part in a judge preferring one poet over another, it also plays a part in a particular judge or editor preferring poems over other poems by the same poet.
‘Hummingbird’ contains Ashberrian mysteries. We have no idea what the father is
guilty of; I have no idea what parable
goes unfulfilled here, it may be one in common circulation I haven’t heard of
yet or it may be one which comprises part of the poet’s own personal mythology,
either way I am convinced as a reader of the appropriateness and poetic truth
of the statement. An observation of a hummingbird which might merely educate
and entertain on a zoological level is lifted onto another plain with the
insight that the facts of the bird’s durability can inform the survival tactics
of a person in crisis. The last three lines make words describe an experience
which cannot be recounted through the language of factual reportage. How do you
draw light from a wound? How does it guide the silence afterwards? It takes a
skillful poet to convince us of the truth of such statements without us dismissing
them as whimsy. I have been convinced.
‘The Bees Have Been Cancelled’ is a more
straight-forward poem whose music I adore. In spite of it being arranged as a
block of prose, it is one of the most musical poems in the competition, with a
confident beat and euphonous consonance. It takes risks with language which
pay off and surprise such as using ‘currency’ as a verb. Calling a bee an
integer is also part of that language skill. Nowhere does the stretching of the
language jolt you out of the hum of the poem.
I love the
Mahonesque music of Paula Cunningham’s (Northern Ireland)‘The Weather in the Mournes’. That is
not to say that the poem is derivative of Derek Mahon but that she exercises
the same care for sound as her established Ulster compatriot. She also succeeds
in presenting a depiction of the Irish landscape which avoids all the timeworn
clichés which lesser hands have mined out of Heaney’s and Kavanagh’s original
visions. As in Popa’s poems, assonance, consonance and alliteration have big
parts to play here without sounding overworked or strained. The sounds delight
the ear as much as the detailed descriptions do the mind’s eye.
Matthew
Sweeney’s (Ireland) poem ‘Benito’ is an animal of a different sort from the poems of Popa
and Cunningham. Where Popa and Cunningham make language sparkle, Sweeney shows
how effective a poetic idiom free of ostentation can be. Like all the top fifty
poems ‘Benito’ stood out from most of the submissions through its confidence
and authority in language. ‘Benito’ is the sort of poetry which does not get
lost in translation. The
language here is fully self-aware with a crafted subtle rhythm to the lines,
but conveys its poetic truths in a way which is easily more transferrable to a
different lexicon. Where Popa creates poetic truth with newly-coined locutions,
Sweeney does it through parable. Where Popa alludes to parable Sweeney presents
one whole. The recounting of fully-clothed otter hunting, brandy-swilling,
arboreal pissing and trout with Espresso might all seem like mere whimsy if it
didn't so skilfully accumulate into a metaphor for making the most of life
against the background of unfulfilled promise and abject failure. The things
each of us do every day to compensate for disappointment are usually more
mundane and less adventurous than swimming after otters, awaking a whole forest
with your song or seeking a good espresso to accompany your al fresco trout.
Sweeney’s skill in this poem, as in so many of his poems is to address
fundamental questions of existence without resort to the language of
philosophical query; by reminding us how our ordinary lives mimic in outline
the struggles of those with wilder experience. People who say Sweeney’s poems
often lack metaphors and similes fail to see the wood for the trees. His poems
are metaphors in their entirety.
Cithog is
an Irish language term for left-hander. Up to the 1940s or 50s children in
Irish schools would have been brutally beaten out of writing with their left
hand – made to write with their right hand. Here is a poem by a young poet (Dean
Browne, Ireland) who would have entered school in the 90s and who still felt it was an
issue even then. The poem skilfully describes the process of laying words on a
page old style (though not as old style as nibs and inkwells) and there is an
old-fashioned feel to this poem, every word looks comfortable in its place, the
syntax is neat and well-behaved unlike the handwriting it describes. In an
Irish context it is unavoidable to read allusions to Heaney’s ‘Digging’ in this
poem. The simple enough twist in the last two lines and the emotional conflict
building up to it lift the poem out of being an example of mere description.
Faizel Deen (Canada)
might be an almost namesake of Deane Browne but one can see from his poem that
he hails from a completely different world. The language of ‘Museum’ is not
neat and well-behaved in an English context. There is a playfulness here which
entertains me, the juxtaposition of Western and Asian cultural icons might seem capricious but actually accurately reflects the globalised world we
now find ourselves in. In spite of the disordered lineation not a word seems
out of place.
Mark Fiddes’s (UK)
‘Another Gravity’ won me over despite some of the rhymes being a little too
familiar. I swallowed “honey” with “money” and “sweet” with “eat” because I
liked “hers” with “saboteurs” and “sewn” with “stone”. English is such a
rhyme-poor language it’s difficult to write a compelling, readable poem as well
ordered as this one, but Fiddes avoids creating just another example of verbal
topiary with his narrative and descriptive skills and his ability to turn such
wonderful locutions such as “the shaded wall of a dream” and “harlequin tartan
of our past”; the air thickening with the static of hate etc.
James Hughes’s (Australia)
“The Breath in Things” is a poem which shares a marvelous delight in the music
of words. Right from the beginning we know we are in the hands of a master word
musician with “a scorched /Horse picked at scarce grass”. Hughes doesn't need
end rhymes to prove his musical ear. Here we have a poem not of argument or
narrative but of memories and sense impressions linked loosely in a way reader’s
intuition assures us is right and unified also by the consistency of an authoritative
voice.
Ian McEwen’s (UK)
‘In the Bottle’ delighted me with its music and skillful use of repetition as a
device. The most successful song-like poem in the whole competition.
Nuala Ni
Chonchuir’s (Ireland) ‘Juno Refuses to Look at Warhol’ builds up to the poetic insight
often revealed through the fresh perspective of a child’s eye. Derek Mahon
composed a two liner based on his infant daughter’s observation of sunlight
reflected on a ceiling. Here Ni Chonchuir spins a charming narrative.
Meghann
Plunkett’s (USA) ‘Eve’ parable is composed of language as gritty and robust as its
conclusion. The rhythm and cadences of the poem are well measured.
Theadora
Siranian’s (USA)‘Hitler’s Bathtub’ was one of a compelling four poem sequence
submitted concerning the second world war photography of Lee Miller. As strong
as all the poems were, this one worked best on its own – a wonderful example of
how visual art can inspire poetry.
Mark
Wagenaar’s (USA) ‘Broken Sonnet: Last Sketch’ - a strong rhythm beats through the
arteries of these lines. The poem’s (broken) non-sentences subvert the expectations
of tradition which the sonnet form evokes, much like how De Chirico’s
surrealism subverted his classically proportioned paintings.